Just thought i'd let y'all know

[HuskerPower52]

Well once again thanks, and looks like I will be doing a lot of rewriting. But you've been very helpful. My movie is a comedy. Fwiw

 

[The Iron Horse]

Well once again thanks, and looks like I will be doing a lot of rewriting. But you've been very helpful. My movie is a comedy. Fwiw

what type? slapstick? parody? black comedy? screwball? Satire? romantic comedy?

a key to comedy writing is using the unexpected, adding running gags is always good. but like all others, you need three acts, you need some conflict and a call to action. you need a resolution. look at anchormen, we meet the crew, then we meet the new girl, and we are inform she will join the crew. this sets the whole thing in motion. act 2, the crew tries to date her, then get her fired. finally Ron and Veronica become rivals, and ron gets fired, and loses his dog. act 3, he is needed to cover the birth of the panda, and save the gang. but again, use the unexpected. for example, that scene when they are walking around and get into a major fight with the other crew. dialogue will be more important than action, depending on what type of comedy you write. Also, your characters must make poor decisions that the audience can see will lead to disaster. Again, Anchorman, we know it won't end well when Ron starts messing with Veronica.

Now, I will add that you can add some simple elements of camera directions. For example.

We start close on Michael's face, we pull back to reveal his entire body, which is covered in horse manure. We pull back more and see that Michael is inside a church.

MICHAEL
Is this the McMahon wedding?

The entire congregations SHOUT at him, "No".

With comedy you don't have to start your actions as late as possible, but there most be some payoff.

Michael pulls inside his garage. He hits the REMOTE CONTROL to the garage door, but it doesn't close. A DONKEY named HECTOR runs inside the garage.

MICHAEL
Damn it, is Hector again

Michael exit the car and heads to the door. When he pulls on the doorknob, the entire door falls to the ground.

MICHAEL
Hector, you better not be responsible for this.

also, know your beats when making a scene. Beats are flag points to how the scene will work.

So beat one. Michael pulls into the garage. garage won't close, Hector the donkey walks in.

beat two, Michael goes to the door and pulls the doorknob only to see it fall to the ground.

again, I am more than happy to help.

 

[chucksker]

Brasky bein the fuckin grammar nazi of course

 

[Driaz]

Brasky bein the fuckin grammar nazi of course

I know I laughed. You have to admit chuckles it's kind of funny to start a thread about a book you are writing while making so many grammar/spelling mistakes......

I hope you hire a good editor.....

I'm not trying to dissuade you at all, but writing a book that is interesting and intriguing enough that other people want to read it is not some simple and easy thing to do.....Even some of the contemporary authors I enjoy reading today wrote some downright awful stuff at the beginning of their careers......

As was pointed out, if you are serious, and are willing to put the time and effort into it, after about 15 years and a ton of criticism you might start to write some good stories!

Definitely wishing you good luck, sir! Listen to the advice The Iron Horse is offering......While he hasn't come out and divulged exactly what he does, he obviously writes in some fashion professionally based off his mastery of the language and eloquent prose demonstrated in just his off the cuff casual postings on a sports message board.....

Best of luck for sure, but writing professionally is no easy job.....

 

[Tomhusker]

I know I laughed. You have to admit chuckles it's kind of funny to start a thread about a book you are writing while making so many grammar/spelling mistakes......

I hope you hire a good editor.....

I'm not trying to dissuade you at all, but writing a book that is interesting and intriguing enough that other people want to read it is not some simple and easy thing to do.....Even some of the contemporary authors I enjoy reading today wrote some downright awful stuff at the beginning of their careers......

As was pointed out, if you are serious, and are willing to put the time and effort into it, after about 15 years and a ton of criticism you might start to write some good stories!

Definitely wishing you good luck, sir! Listen to the advice The Iron Horse is offering......While he hasn't come out and divulged exactly what he does, he obviously writes in some fashion professionally based off his mastery of the language and eloquent prose demonstrated in just his off the cuff casual postings on a sports message board.....

Best of luck for sure, but writing professionally is no easy job.....

Pay no attention to this. The kid who wrote the Aragon books was, what, like 14 years old? And the Harry Potter lady, she did it as a side job. It must be easy.

 

[chucksker]

I know I laughed. You have to admit chuckles it's kind of funny to start a thread about a book you are writing while making so many grammar/spelling mistakes......

I hope you hire a good editor.....

I'm not trying to dissuade you at all, but writing a book that is interesting and intriguing enough that other people want to read it is not some simple and easy thing to do.....Even some of the contemporary authors I enjoy reading today wrote some downright awful stuff at the beginning of their careers......

As was pointed out, if you are serious, and are willing to put the time and effort into it, after about 15 years and a ton of criticism you might start to write some good stories!

Definitely wishing you good luck, sir! Listen to the advice The Iron Horse is offering......While he hasn't come out and divulged exactly what he does, he obviously writes in some fashion professionally based off his mastery of the language and eloquent prose demonstrated in just his off the cuff casual postings on a sports message board.....

Best of luck for sure, but writing professionally is no easy job.....

I'm not exactly writing it with the goal of it becoming some famous book

Honestly the chances of me actually even writing a second draft are pretty slim. I'm more of just writing it cause I enjoy it and it passes the time, not necessarily for anyone to read it except for a few friends and family perhaps