OT: Song Lyrics You Don't Like For Stupid Reasons

[4thstreet]

Any damn song by Barry Manilow.As a favor to all I will not post any lines here.

If so inclined to listen to his mindless ramblings,you can drop a few hundred bucks and view the prince of polyester,in Vegas.

 

[Vadered]

I see you drivin' round town with the girl I love,
and I'm like, @#$% you!
I guess the change in my pocket wasn't enough,
I'm like, @#@$ you, and @#$% her too!
Said, if I was richer, I'd still be with ya.
Now ain't that some shit.
And although there's pain in my chest, I still wish you the best,
with a @#$^ you!


This song's lyrics have always bothered me. The first part of the chorus has him referring to "you" as the guy "driving round town with the girl I love." Later in the chorus, the line "If I was richer, I'd still be with you" seems to be referring to the girl herself. That or Cee Lo wants to be with both parties. I guess that's where the line "@^%& you, and @#$^ her too" comes in.

 

[puckhead]

-----^ just a transition

'fuck you, and fuck her too'
that's when the song becomes about "her"

 

[Vadered]

-----^ just a transition

'fuck you, and fuck her too'
that's when the song becomes about "her"

That's not a transition at all. Mentioning somebody in the third person in no way justifies using them as the focus of the second person in the very next line. It's ambiguous, and while I can figure it out, it's jarring and gets me focusing on shitty writing rather than enjoying a song.

 

[Darkstone42]

That's not a transition at all. Mentioning somebody in the third person in no way justifies using them as the focus of the second person in the very next line. It's ambiguous, and while I can figure it out, it's jarring and gets me focusing on shitty writing rather than enjoying a song.

I agree. Poor pronoun/tense usage bothers me to no end.

Passive voice, however, doesn't bother me, as evidenced by the fact that I use it all the time.

In fact, I just did.

I need to stop using passive voice, though, because it's bad writing.

 

[Winged_Wheel88]

And WW88 needs to stop talking about himself in the 3rd person.