Songwriting Advice

[SteveStone]

Hey All!!! I wrote a song recently and was looking for some constructive criticism. Thanks to all those who take the time!!!

Here is the link!!!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wgWpKxGUWh8

 

[Tai Chi≈Surfing]

I didn't click that link.....but that's your premier post?

Hmmmm

 

[SteveStone]

Don't

be mad that your three teams suck.

 

[outofyourmind]

Not all that bad, but I'm no songwriting critic.
Are those others I saw that you had your own songs or you just playing something somebody else wrote..

 

[RobBase]

I like it. Sounds like good bar music.

 

[SteveStone]

All the songs with my ugly mug in it are mine.

 

[Tai Chi≈Surfing]

I'm trying to determine what your other screen name was, "mr. composer".....lol

 

[SteveStone]

This

is my one and only.

 

[DragonfromTO]

Needs more of the "N" word

 

[Used 2 B Hu]

My songwriting advice is this: never use the word "orange" in a song.

Nothing rhymes with orange.

 

[SteveStone]

How about

Florence?

"I was gathering some oranges when I realized I was still in FLorence"

 

[Used 2 B Hu]

Florence?

"I was gathering some oranges when I realized I was still in FLorence"

Hah! Nice attempt. There are a couple of other ones, like "month."

I'd go youtube yer song, but I'm at work and I'm a busy man, or something...

 

[outofyourmind]

I'd fire that dude on the guitar who's singing.
He's butchering your song.




j/k

 

[Logicallylethal]

You can absolutely rhyme with orange or oranges...it just depends on how you enunciate the word

Oranges (Or-Rin-Ges)...Four Inches...Door Hinges...Syringes...etc